Hi Emily, I think some of the points you have included in your writing. I like how you said the government would have looked at multiple perspectives before closing the border. However, I wonder if you did research for this piece of writing? Your writing will be stronger if you use evidence to support your opinions.
Also remember to refer back to our class writing planning as we had discussed what the structure for this type of writing should look like. You can find this under the 'whaea Tamzin' tab on the Kahikatea Hub site.
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Hi Emily, I think some of the points you have included in your writing. I like how you said the government would have looked at multiple perspectives before closing the border. However, I wonder if you did research for this piece of writing? Your writing will be stronger if you use evidence to support your opinions.
ReplyDeleteAlso remember to refer back to our class writing planning as we had discussed what the structure for this type of writing should look like. You can find this under the 'whaea Tamzin' tab on the Kahikatea Hub site.
Remember we want to make quality blog posts. This includes a statement about your learning, a question at the end for the reader and labels. You could have used these labels for this piece of writing: research, lockdown, writing and point of view.